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Ode to Christy Chase by ~SecondSwipe:iconSecondSwipe:



Maybe you know me
That dork in the front
He is me, Quinn Brutowsky
And I’m sorry if I’m blunt
But remember back then
That football game night?
When I gave you a soda
And you said, “Thanks, alright!”?
You brushed on my hand
And from that evening on
My heart was encaptured
By your sweet siren song
You breathe in the oxygen
And out CO2
When I can’t hear you breathing
Then I feel blue
You’re prettier than
An Elven priestess
Who’s locked in a dungeon
By the dragon Bormess
You smell like my mother
On last mother’s day
But its not like I like her!
At least not that way…
When I hear your name
My heart goes a’ reeling
It doesn’t take an algorithm
To plot out this feeling
When I’m hanging for life
My the end of my drawers
From the top of a flagpole
The jocks keeping score
I remember your face
And its pimple-free sheen
And I can’t help but smile
While my braces doth gleem
And so I must ask you
And hope for a chance
Will you come with me
To our next school dance?
©2007-2009 ~SecondSwipe
:iconsecondswipe:

Author's Comments

XD So this is my whimsical submission to *salshep 's "Worst Romantic Poem/Romance Story Contest". XP I believe it fits the bill. ^^ I hope you all enjoy it. XD I know I had a HELLUVA lot of fun writing it.

Feel free to comment and critique, but this is it in its final form. XD

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My braces doth gleam!

Man, that is absolutely horrific. very nice :D

--
We are stardust, we are golden, we are billion year old carbon,
And we got to get ourselves back to the garden - CSNY
:iconsecondswipe:
XD Thank you! I can only hope it is awful enough.

XP Man, this is such a WEIRD contest.

--
Someone asked me once why I write.

I'll get back to you on that.
:iconviris:
This made me laugh :) Well done, I hope you do well in your contest.

'You smell like my mother
On last mother’s day
But its not like I like her!
At least not that way…
When I hear your name' :D!

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"Ten years before, she would have been considered pretty; now, with lines around her mouth and the stain of persistent dissapointment in her eyes, she was almost beautiful."

from "The Dumb House" - John Burnside
:iconsecondswipe:
^^ Thank you. XP I was a little worried about those lines that you quoted, but apparently they worked. XD Thanks again!

--
Someone asked me once why I write.

I'll get back to you on that.
:iconviris:
It made me think of cheap perfume as teenager's (myself also, i guess ;) gifts to mothers on mother's day- I'm not sure if that was your intention but i dug it! Take care.

--
"Ten years before, she would have been considered pretty; now, with lines around her mouth and the stain of persistent dissapointment in her eyes, she was almost beautiful."

from "The Dumb House" - John Burnside
:iconsecondswipe:
;-; NOOOO!! *tackles* *bandages* ^^; That bad?

XD And what the hell are you doing up this late?

--
Someone asked me once why I write.

I'll get back to you on that.
:iconsweetcapris:
I love it. hehe

--
We are stardust, we are golden, we are billion year old carbon,
And we got to get ourselves back to the garden - CSNY
:iconancient-seeker:
Wow, I think I would go off myself if anyone wrote this poem to me! Well done!

--
Disclaimer: No, I'm not serious.
Sorry about my bad English, I'm a moron.
:]

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